Writing Homework Help

Hi,

I currently need help revising and making the document look more formal that is due tomorrow night sunday. I have professor comments on how to edit the document for you as well which will make it easier. The document is a guide on computer science. I am going to post a pdf file of what my document needs to look like with uniformness and stuff like that. 

Here is the professors recommendations on changes. 

You’ve collected a wide range of relevant resources that you’ve spent a lot of time describing. The preface is also pretty good in terms of structure and content. I would recommend working on the formatting, though. The table of contents could be redesigned a little. When making levels in a table of contents, usually the main sections are aligned fully left while the subsections or individual entries are then indented. You’ll also want to be consistent about what you’re including in the table of contents. For example, sometimes you’re listing tips and sometimes you aren’t. It’s also not really necessary to list both the resources and the tips about the resources in the table of contents. Leaving them out will help make it look more stream-lined and easy to follow. For the design of the resources–each resource should be on its own page. This will make each one stand out more clearly instead of running together. You’ve included a lot of resources and some of them seem more relevant than others. For example, the entry on Gmail could probably be cut. The more focused you can make your guide, the better. The other thing I would recommend is to try to make your entries as uniform and focused as you can. Right now, some of your abstracts are really long and could be condensed. Some include bolded headings and other design elements while others don’t. Some include a lot of tips, etc. The more uniform in appearance they are, the more professional your document will appear. The abstracts should be focused on explaining what the resource is, highlighting the most important information included in it, and explaining why this information is important or useful to your particular audience. Usually, around one paragraph should be sufficient. You don’t have to try to include everything about the document–just the most relevant aspects. Finally, your writing tone is much more professional than in Project 1–so that’s great! There are still a lot of typos. I’ve attached a copy of your paper with comments in the margins pointing out/correcting some of these. Just be aware that my corrections aren’t comprehensive. I’ve tried to point out recurring errors the first time they occur–I haven’t flagged each following instance.

You’ve collected a wide range of relevant resources that you’ve spent a lot of time describing. The preface is also pretty good in terms of structure and content. I would recommend working on the formatting, though. The table of contents could be redesigned a little. When making levels in a table of contents, usually the main sections are aligned fully left while the subsections or individual entries are then indented. You’ll also want to be consistent about what you’re including in the table of contents. For example, sometimes you’re listing tips and sometimes you aren’t. It’s also not really necessary to list both the resources and the tips about the resources in the table of contents. Leaving them out will help make it look more stream-lined and easy to follow. For the design of the resources–each resource should be on its own page. This will make each one stand out more clearly instead of running together. You’ve included a lot of resources and some of them seem more relevant than others. For example, the entry on Gmail could probably be cut. The more focused you can make your guide, the better. The other thing I would recommend is to try to make your entries as uniform and focused as you can. Right now, some of your abstracts are really long and could be condensed. Some include bolded headings and other design elements while others don’t. Some include a lot of tips, etc. The more uniform in appearance they are, the more professional your document will appear. The abstracts should be focused on explaining what the resource is, highlighting the most important information included in it, and explaining why this information is important or useful to your particular audience. Usually, around one paragraph should be sufficient. You don’t have to try to include everything about the document–just the most relevant aspects. Finally, your writing tone is much more professional than in Project 1–so that’s great! There are still a lot of typos. I’ve attached a copy of your paper with comments in the margins pointing out/correcting some of these. Just be aware that my corrections aren’t comprehensive. I’ve tried to point out recurring errors the first time they occur–I haven’t flagged each following instance.