Writing Homework Help

I have written a draft and received feedback (below) and I need someone to modify the paper and make it better.

You’ve created a very good introduction to the nature and benefits of horse-based therapy. If you want to expand on it a little bit, since this is for your design thesis, you could add a little more description of the physical nature of horses to be used, the breds and their size. You could also describe the physical and spatial needs of the therapy settings – feeding, riding, etc. It would be very desirable to add photos or drawings as well.