Discussion #10A – Rough Draft Introduction

Part one: Create the following sentences required below and then put them together into your introduction paragraph.

Part two: Once you have posted your answers, you will see your group mates. Reply with a minimum of 5 sentences to one person to help him / her improve their writing, ask a question and/or say what they did really well.

A ] Creating the Hook

Create 4 different kinds of hooks about the subject of this introduction – remember that this time we are focusing on chapters 4,5,6:

1. Write an interesting statistic/fact about this subject that most people do not know – quote your source

1. Write a famous quote which may apply to this subject – put the quote in quotation marks (author of quote)

1. Write an important question that we might ask about the topic. [do not ask about bidding as the reader may not know what this is]

1. Write a bit of wisdom / old saying you know that is suggested by this subject. It can come from the USA or your country.

Look at your 4 hooks and decide which one you like the best and use that one in your paragraph 🙂

B ] Background information:

1. Write a sentence that explains your favorite hook and relate it to the book, using author name and book title.

2. Write a sentence that introduces who the author of the book is – profession, life experiences that are important.

3. Write 3 sentences telling what the book is about. Define important terms like emotional command systems, emotional heritage, and emotional communication skills in your own words. Focus on chapters 4,5,6.

4. Write 3 sentences explaining why the book is important and why someone should read it.

C ] Make a thesis statement to include the following:

John Gottman’s text The Relationship Cure addresses the importance of really understanding ourselves and others to promote healthy relationships, with which I agree or with which I disagree.

D] NOW: Put all those sentences together in paragraph form and write your introduction:

Discussion #10B – Rough Draft Conclusion Essay 2

Part one: Create the following sentences required below and then put them together into your conclusion paragraph.

Part two: Once you have posted your answers, you will see your group mates. Reply with a minimum of 5 sentences to one person to help him / her improve their writing, ask a question and/or say what they did really well.

A] Write a college level transition and connect it to a restatement of your thesis in different words: DO NOT use in conclusion, to conclude, in sum, in summary, in the end, overall.

B] DO NOT USE Summary. Because we already have a summary paragraph, we are going to make an action oriented conclusion.

1. Gottman idea [quote sandwich]:
Use a transition and then summarize one of Gottman’s suggestions for improving one’s relationship that you have not yet mentioned in your essay:

Use context + a quote to illustrate Gottman’s suggestion:

Write an explanation sentence on how this idea will improve someone’s relationships:

2. Your idea: Make you own suggestion for improving one’s relationships

Use a transition and then make a suggestion of your own for improving relationships:

The write 2 sentences explaining your suggestion and how it will improve other’s relationships.

3. Make a call to action:

Write 3 sentences encouraging readers to change how they interact with others to improve relationships. You may also make a prediction, give advice, use a quote or ask a question if that works for you.

D] Put all of your sentences together in paragraph form to write your 10-12 sentence conclusion below. Remember the very last sentence to be a sentence in your own words – no quotes or questions.